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poem ... Dig It

Posted by Atticus on December 13, 2004, at 15:52:10

Dig It

Dig it as the multi-platinum,
Shock-and-awe and flatten ’em,
Saks Fifth Avenue Manhattan ’em,
Prized Super-Size and fatten’ em,
Orwell-prophesized go rat on ’em,
Dapper fat cat go top hat on ’em,
Grab police batons and bat on ’em,
Ignored the poor and spat on ’em,
Take away the welcome mat on ’em,
Make war not love and Patton ’em,
Elasticize lies to silk and satin ’em,
Red and blue states trade tit-for-tat on ’em,
Boil the oil and dump the vat on ’em
Nation stamps on brain cells that go splat on ’em.
-- Atticus

 

Re: poem ... Dig It » Atticus

Posted by Phil on December 13, 2004, at 16:23:32

In reply to poem ... Dig It, posted by Atticus on December 13, 2004, at 15:52:10

Fingers snapping.

 

Re: poem ... Dig It » Phil

Posted by Atticus on December 13, 2004, at 16:39:17

In reply to Re: poem ... Dig It » Atticus, posted by Phil on December 13, 2004, at 16:23:32

Coltrane's playing at the Village Vanguard. That's one hip lip. Let's grab the girls and go, daddio. ;) Atticus

 

You are one gone cat (nm) » Atticus

Posted by kid47 on December 13, 2004, at 17:05:15

In reply to poem ... Dig It, posted by Atticus on December 13, 2004, at 15:52:10

 

Re: poem ... Dig It » Atticus

Posted by alesta on December 13, 2004, at 17:36:40

In reply to poem ... Dig It, posted by Atticus on December 13, 2004, at 15:52:10

atticus, bravissime! you creative cat you..i sometimes wonder where you get your ideas. i know you're worldly and get around a lot, but i don't think that explains it. care to share?

anyway, this poem is the bomb..on a side note, this rhythm kinda reminds me of eminem's music. maybe you should write lyrics for rappers! they'd love to get their hands on this trippy sh$t. very nice. :-)

amy

 

Re: poem ... Dig It » alesta

Posted by Atticus on December 13, 2004, at 22:55:17

In reply to Re: poem ... Dig It » Atticus, posted by alesta on December 13, 2004, at 17:36:40

Hi Amy,
Actually, you're spot on with the pseudo hip-hip rhythm that I seem to have fallen into. It used to be that imagery drove my poems, but now I'm fascinated with sound. To check the rhythm, I read them to myself really fast in a voice that's almost a whisper. That's because I can't vocalize my own stuff as fast and as cleanly as I'd like to with my voice at full volume. Too many internal rhymes. I'd need a good rapper to stand in for me at a reading. Stay cool, mama. ;) Atticus

 

Re: poem ... Dig It » Atticus

Posted by alesta on December 14, 2004, at 6:33:59

In reply to Re: poem ... Dig It » alesta, posted by Atticus on December 13, 2004, at 22:55:17


thanks for breaking that down for me about shaping your poems by sound, atticus. that's interesting. great poem (surprise, surprise:))

mama. i like that, no one's ever called me that before, lol. i am kind of talking like i'm from the ghetto lately, lol. not sure why, i'm caucasian from the suburbs. but i like when you call me that. :)

amy


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