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Posted by Phil on October 23, 2013, at 18:53:56
I've been depressed for 90 days
I don't eat, walking in a haze
Don't need a shower, sleep on the floor
Trash piling up what's it all forBut when I woke up this morning
Goddamn I feel so good
Didn't wake the wife up
Sped out of the neighborhoodI'm thinking California, never been there
I've got $20,000 and I don't have a care
Look at that sunrise, just a big orange ball
Man this is fun, I love it in the fall25, 45, 75, 95
Speeding maybe baby I don't know
Hey there's a hitcher, pretty cute from here
Picked her up her name was..I don't knowStopped at the store and bought some beer
Cigarettes and some Gummy Bears
Got some gas this is taking too long
I floored it baby I don't know laughed25, 45, 75, 95
Stopped the pills, about a month ago
I don't know has a special trick
I skidded sideways in the bar ditchHow old are you darlin'
She said 16. hey you want to get in
The back seat, there's lots of
Whoa lawdy me25, 45, 75, 95
Wish I had more Amphetamine
Just for I don't know and me
We whipped into Dallas DFWTwo for LA she's my daughter HAHA!!
I don't know have you been to LA
No I ain't never been out of Texas
Me neither so this should be funWow that looks like a 747
Wish we could ride on the outside
Not sure about you
But exciting flight would have new meaningI love flying I guess it's my thing
I wanted to be a pilot but they said I's insane
What's that got to do with anything
I don't know let's go to the bathroom25, 45, 75, 95
Where's she get her---knowledge
I love flying I beat on the walls
The flight attendant was beating on the door
What do you want to break this up forWe landed in LA there were Marshall's there
They said you're in a world of sh*t
I said I'm a pastor I don't know is my flock
He slammed the door and I heard the lockMANIC
Posted by Phil on October 23, 2013, at 19:53:47
In reply to MANIC, posted by Phil on October 23, 2013, at 18:53:56
Unless something good comes along.
Posted by Phillipa on October 23, 2013, at 23:29:37
In reply to Poetry factory closed, posted by Phil on October 23, 2013, at 19:53:47
Phil I'm glad this is poetry and not what you are doing. As you definitely would be over the edge with mania. Phillipa
Posted by Phil on October 24, 2013, at 8:23:24
In reply to Re: Poetry factory closed » Phil, posted by Phillipa on October 23, 2013, at 23:29:37
I just tried to capture the frenetic energy of a man waking up manic and the destruction it caused. Even though I've forgotten most of it I was very good in English in high school and my only year at college.
I'm hoping to keep writing esp after the compliments from two people who know writing. We'll see.
Posted by Phil on October 24, 2013, at 9:46:40
In reply to Re: Poetry factory closed » Phil, posted by Phillipa on October 23, 2013, at 23:29:37
Also, real writers don't have to be dying to write about dying. They pull from experiences and their minds.
The manic one also, not consciously, wanted to show the craziness of Leaving Las Vegas. Just crazy beyond belief.
One person I want to write about is Amy Winehouse. I would love to write a tribute like Bernie Taupin wrote about Marilyn. But I'm too close to the subject. But I'll try sooner or later.Writing, good or bad, works my brain better than math which I suck at.
Posted by rockerchick46 on November 2, 2013, at 15:30:44
In reply to Re: Poetry factory closed, posted by Phil on October 24, 2013, at 9:46:40
Love it sounds like a good rock song will post some of my stuff when i get home and dig out my notebook.
Tam
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